Thursday, July 1, 2010

Growing up

              By Mory Keita

When I was two and half feet, I was a rose,
And my Mama was my moon and my Dad was my sun.
They made me blossom with the purest of love.

At dawn my Dad would rise with the sun,
He would wake me up with his beams,
And tell me to eat and part for school, all with love.
He wished to make me grow beautiful and strong.

At dusk when the sun slept behind invisible mountains,
My Mama would appear with the moon,behind the cloudy curtain.
She would with a smile follow me wherever I went to.
She was with me in dreams and nightmares, in light and darkness.
I was her little prince and she watched over me growing up with love.

Now that I am six and half feet,
My Dad's sunlight is fleeting and my Mama’s moonlight is vanishing.
Tho' their love is falling like leaves,
They will always remain in heart my sun and moon.

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Robert Lloyd said...

"When I was two and half feet I was a rose,And my Mama was my moon and my dad was my sun.They made me blossom with the purest of love."

The opening to this poem was beautiful. I really enjoyed how you used a passing day in relation to life. Thank you for sharing!

Are you really 6 and half feet tall?

Mory said...

Not really Robert. I am 6.2 feet tall. Is that surprising?

Thank you for your gracious comment and thank you for the support in this process.


Stafford Ray said...

Yes Mory, having good parents is the best blessing we can pass on to our own children. Lovely poem.

Anonymous said...

some really wonderful lines here, I especially liked your opening line, 'When I was two and half feet I was a rose.' The image of a kid being a rose really drew me in and held me for the rest of the poem. Great writing. I just joined Poets United too, so I look forward to reading more of your work.

Gabriela Abalo said...

I love the tenderness of the poem. So true... when growing up our dad is the sun and our mama the moon. - I totally relate with that

Well done


Mory said...

Patience,as a member of poet united, i also look forward to reading more of your poetry.

Gabriela, i really like your blog. it present life as it is and explore foreign culture. great job!

it makes me happy to see that so many of you identify yourselves in this poem.

Thank you both,

rch said...

Hi Mory, great visuals here and I can feel your love for your parents emanating from this poem, you are very lucky.

Mory said...

Thank you very much rch. i really appreciate it.

Anonymous said...

This is such a beautiful poem! My favorite part was "My Dad's sunlight is fleeting and my Mama’s moonlight is vanishing.
Tho' their love is falling like leaves,"

Your parents must be so very proud of you and the love that you feel for weeps from every word you have written.

I have sampled some of your other poems and find them to be written in an interesting old-world kind of style.

Keep it up and I will be back.

Mory said...


Thank you very much for your generous comment. it is truly encouraging. that like happens to be one of my favorites.


Carrie Van Horn said...

Very moving and beautiful. The love between a parent and a child is to me the stongest of there is. Love how you painted that picture with your words. :-)

Mory said...

thank you very much Carrie. love is life and life is love.

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Hi Mory, first let say thank for stopping buy and following my site.
I love your words and the stricking images of your Moon as a Moon Goddess and your Father as the Sun, Both are need in life to grow and become the person you should be, Now you are all grown and writing lovely poems. Thanks for the great read


Mory said...

Thank you very much Melanie for taking the time to read this poem.

Eric S. said...

Wonderful poem. Speaks so eloquently of a parents love. Absolutely loved the first few lines.

Kathe W. said...

what a lovely poem - a tribute to your parents.

RA said...

Beautiful lines that brought tears in my eyes...

Carrie Van Horn said...

I remember this one is a wonderful poem and perfect for the prompt. :-)

Tumblewords: said...

How lovely it is! This slice of life flows beautifully...

Tess Kincaid said...

Such a sweet and tender piece. Lovely tribute to your parents.

Djene said...

Totally agree. Love it too
Thank you for sharing

Linda said...

A wonderful tribute to wonderful parents. Reminds me a lot of mine.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Beautiful poem, and a loving tribute to your loving parents. Lovely.

Claudia said...

beautiful and honoring words - love it

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